Lynette Hutchinson reviewed Captured - Talia on Aug 31, 2017 04:03 AM [Report This]

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pulangpagong reviewed I Saw Her Standing There - Lillith (Part III) on Oct 30, 2013 02:20 AM [Report This]

michi here!! im gonna do the whole review in this part then :)

part one: first of all. did i ever mention how much i love your writing seriously i was like "what is a Blitzer"?? ( i read satin as satan before whats wrong w me). i literally forgot how much of a pervert shige is though. and how artsy he is. help ive fallen and i cant get up. koyama is so genuinely like the characters who are kinda annoying but super important yup i'd be so happy to smack his head. omg shige stop stop stop stop being perfect. goddamn his intelligent i cantttt. (brainy is the new sexy).
"Did the girl have a speech impediment? Did she need to pause after every single word? " FAVEEE.
"Not her adorable Beatle-like best friend Koyama" im CRYING because he is totally a beatle and not a rolling stone. singing imagine instead of a rolling stones song. ahaha
R Y O. RYOOO.
shige is such a child why do i love you?!
"A priest’s daughter and a rock star, it’ll be a love to remember." i love this so muchhhhhh.

part two: "But her sentence became useless as Shige leaned over the table and wiped it with his napkin" i literally thought he was gonna kiss it away or something gross lmao
takeru mind your own goddamn business omg just kidding. hes so presh.
“It wasn’t me! Michirui was the one who fell into his arms I promise!” SERIOUSLY THERE ARE TEARS THREATENING TO COME OUT OF MY EYES HE IS ASFKLJDF KOYAMAAA.
shige omg hes so straight up it's actually awesome. like ive been reading pining fics for so long im so glad hes just like I LOVE HER straight away like let's not waste time here. his ego is so. jesus h christ.
“I’d like to make your daughter my wife one day." reminds me of this song called "marry your daughter" it's fitting haha
lmao PLOT TWIST.
"The guy was practically a nymphomaniac" yes scientifically proven hes a goddamn pervert
“Shige. If you don’t get this girl to fall for you, I’ll fucking kill you.” I LOVE KOYAMA SO MUCH IN THIS YOU DONT EVEN KNOW!!
“You’re like butterflies, you smell sweetly at a flower you land on but you don’t stay forever." this might be my fave line.
nOPE! it's this one "You want to do me upside down and that’s it" OMGGG
SHIGE SHUT UP WITH YOUR GODDAMN SPOKEN WORD.
hes so sweet i maybe died.
"she felt the warmth of his breath land somewhere she was sure her father would disapprove" L MF AO
t a l i a omgggg
“He’s mine.” ASDKJHDKLFJKLDJGJRIOJGKRO OHMYGODDDD

part three: ryo omg i missed him
“Why are you holding my girl’s hands you little dipshit?” *hearrrrtssss*
tego you presh little twat
“Anotherquickie.” Ryo started coughing. YOURE MY FAVE OMG
“I know- fuck you look so hot right now soooo let's just do it? Okay? Okay! I’ll kick the guys out.” shaking MY HEAD SO MUCH OMG
“Ryo and I are going to go get laid so I suggest you do the same.” I LITERALLY READ THIS PART AND I WAS LIKE "TOGETHER???" AND THEN I READ WHAT SHIGE SAID. AND OH MY GOD. shaking my head. WHATEVER WE'RE PERVERTS IT'S COOL I ACCEPT IT
OKAY SERIOUSLY
I
LOVE
THIS
SO
MUCH
YOUR CHARACTERIZATION OF HIM IS LITERALLY PERFECT (PERVY, ARTSY, SMART, COCKY) YESSSSS
LILLITH ILY FOREVER!!!

also: "Toma (as a daddy, as a hockey star, as a freaking awesome bisexual prostitute"

BISEXUAL PROSTITUTE!TOMA IS ACTUALLY SO LMAO THOUGH I SHOULD WRITE MORE OF THAT OR SOMETHING.

OBVIOUSLY HOCKEY STAR TOMA IS MY FAVE -COUGH-

THIS WAS THE BEST STORY THOUGH I LOVE ITTTTTTTTT THANK YOU SOOO MUCH!!
Author's Response: Honestly you don't know how many times I've debated taking it out of this like happy birthday trilogy thing and just publishing on it's own here and just gah. i love this story a lot O.O Your review is perfect tooo but I totally agree brainy is the new sexy <3 (Shige just happens to be both brainy and sexy in this tho XD perfect combination yeyy) and who better to be his band members than 6-nin NEWS <3 but I really like that you noticed Koyama's very annoying XD (He's allowed to be annoying to Michirui...they're childhood friends xD) LOL I debated kissing but this is the 60s and her parents are there XD Shige's a lot of things but he knows he needs to garner the respect of her parents right so that they can let him date their awesomely prude daughter XD (Lololol dwdw you're allowed to yell at Takeru like that...he is after all your brother in the story XD) LOLOL honestly Shige is very...inventive...XD because obviously he can't kiss Michirui or do anything openly forward cause she'll kill the shit out of him if he tries it without her permission...but then he finds all these interesting ways to make her feel the exact same way (KYA omg is my smutness coming out..it is it is T.T) Shige is absurdly posessive neh :D *tears* and so pervy but it has been a couple of months for the said nymphomaniac...if he wasn't trying to hint that hey I'M READY :D ARE YOU READY? CAUSE I LIKE TO DO IT DO IT LIKE MADAGASCAR :D I thought it wouldn't be characteristic of him as a perv. lol seee you and Shige have the same train of thought :D meant to beeeeeeeee <3333 ALSO I'M SO SORRY but I hope I didn't freak you out with the smutness in this story! I mean I was trying to make it very realistic of a first time and stuff and just I'm sorry if it did freak you out :O but I am really proud of it as a writer :D but I'm so happy you loved this Shige :D!! I'm super proud of him too :D he's a great character (one of the best I've ever written I think :D this whole story is one of the best I've ever written in my opinion) ILY forever too :DDD <3 LOLOL WASN'T BISEXUAL PROSTITUTE!Toma hot as fuck :D? I thought he was. If inspiration ever strikes I wouldn't tell you to say no to it XD...but yesss your Hockey Star bias has affected me too man. Taylor's so adorableee <3 and Jordan tooo I went and watched them do their crib video (they're such guys playing video games in their free time XD)

pulangpagong reviewed I Saw Her Standing There - Lillith (Part I) on Apr 21, 2012 11:29 AM [Report This]

LILLITHHHHHHHHHHH!

LILIIIIIIIIIIIITHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!

HOLY MOTHER OF GOD OF MISCHIEF AND CHAOS. YOU DON'T KNOW THE VERY FEELS THAT I FELT.

SO i was kinda confused at first...LOL but then OMG OMGOMGOMGOMG. DUDE.

how DARE you write shige like that?! I FUCKING LOVE ITTTTTTTTTT!!!! can i just...can i just freaking say that his character is so brilliantly written that I WANT HIM. SO BAD. he is so....oh man...so perfect right there! like his words and his actions and shouting after her! feeels feeels feeeeeelssssss!

(take my heart man take itttt!)

i dont give a damn if its late! it's awesome!

and lol...ok i know i was supposed to be all like "michige i wannnntttt right now!"

but dude dude! takeru and shiori! yes shipping it! they're so cute! i bet they're the ones gonna get married.

hahahaha.

“ I did have one girl to keep my company though. The memory of her was enough for me to remind myself that I didn’t need to draw designs on any other skirt. Have you heard of her? M? Yeah…she kept me entertained in my head.”


OH christ almighty THIS GOTTDAMN LINE!

SERIOUSLY....OWNING MY HEART RIGHT NOW!

ITS SO BEAUTIFUL LILLITHHHH!

the priest's daughter and the rockstar. SHIP THIS!

hahahahahhaha ♥♥♥♥♥

it says part I....does that mean there's moreeeeee???????? ohhhh lawddd! no seriously???? if theres more. I WANT MORE. NEED. WANT. NEED.

LILLITH I LOVE YOU. THIS IS AWESOME. AND BRILLIANT. AND I CAN'T FIND WORDS RIGHT NOW to match the beauty that is yours!!!!

pulangpagong reviewed Captured - Talia on Mar 01, 2012 03:02 PM [Report This]

TALITALITALITALI

OMG. CUTENESS OVERLOAD. I LOVEEEE IT!!!! AND THANK YOU SO MUCHHH!!!! AND THE ENDING WAS NOT LAME!!! ♥♥♥♥

CAMERAS. HEHEHEHEHEH ♥♥

TALI I LOVE IT!!! ITS SO GREAT!!

After all, she had met them by accident when they were kissing at their first wedding. She was a silly six year old, playing with a camera, and they were four and seven, pretending to get married. At the moment right when they kissed, she snapped a picture and they turned to see a shy girl looking at them through a lens.


DAMMIT. ITS SO ♥♥♥ YOU ARE SUCH A LIEBLING! TAKE IT! TAKE MY HEART! TAKE IT! HAHAHAHAHA FIGURATIVELY OF COURSE. SHIGE TOTALLY OWNS IT ♥

OHMYGOSHHHHH SERIOUSLY!!! I AM IN A GLASS CASE OF EMOTIONS! MWAHAHHAA!!

THANK YOU SO VERY FUCKING MUCH!!! ILOVEYOUU!!
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