He felt guilt stab him as she tried to wipe away her never-ending tears and looked strong in front of him even when he could see she was at her breaking point. The thought that he was the one to make her...
When you mentioned little mermaid in the summary I thought you meant metaphorically! But it turned out that Tego IS a mermaid LOL... I can imagine cute Tego as a mermaid. Care to tell me where I can get one?
Hi Hime! What an interesting exploration of the plot! I like how you developed the story so that the flow felt natural. I didn't expect them to spend the night together though ... LOL.. But overall I like it! Thank you for the gift!
OMG! You left me wanting for more!!! I absolutly loved it! It was so well written, and the characters were perfect. Hime is a bit a Tom boy but not a cliche, and Tego's character was so well described as well. And Koyama appearance was awesome. It's great the way you really wrote some of the points in the story, like how they meet, a surf accident instead of a shipwreck for example. You did an amazing job, so much better than I could have imagine. Thank you so much! It was a great beginning, I wonder if Hime would believe his story... you really got me wanting for more hahaha Again, thank you so much, it was a great job!