I liked it.
Your story was simple; no one ended up being siblings with their boyfriend, or catching cancer.
I've noticed that you tend to use periods a lot when they're not needed.
"Yeah.... sure..." etc.
I get doing that a few times when you're writing, but you use it a lot.
Other than that it was good.
Jin's appearance was hilarious :)
Author's Response: Ohhhhh thanks a lot!
This really means a lot to me :)
And yes...I love periods lol!
I even used them to comment...XD
I just thought Id add up Jin's appearance to spice things up a bit :D
And nahhhh who needs such drama when real life can be just as dramatic right? :)
Thanks again for your comment and I am going to be more careful with those dreaded dots....XD