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Credit: Excerpt taken from Forbidden Attraction by Christine

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He bit his lip while furrowing his eyebrows. He hadn’t been in this world for too long and already he was wishing he could get out. The Yakuza world hadn’t been really for him, but Nishikido Ryo didn’t really have a choice.
Being born in a poor family and having his only guardian abandon him when he was just a child didn’t make it easy for him to find a regular job, so when Nagase Tomoya, had caught him trying to steal from one of his shops, he had been surprised by the kindness the man had shown him. So now he stood in Nagase’s office, after what felt like a lifetime of service.
Nagase got up from his leather chair, a fat cigar in his mouth, a frown permanently etched on his 35 year old face. He furrowed his thick black eyebrows and puffed out a cloud of smoke. The whole room smelt of tobacco and it was already hard enough to see. Nagase didn’t want windows in his office. Being the Yakuza leader he was he didn’t like it when rooms had windows, arguing that he would be more vulnerable to attack.
“You have been a loyal member of my clan Nishikido.” Nagase said, his voice deep, in part due to nature and in part due to all the cigars he smoked.
Ryo nodded; his hands behind his back, a serious expression on his young face.
“I have a special assignment for you” Nagase continued, pacing around the room. His black hair was tied in a short pony tail, framing his strong features and his dark eyes. His black pointed boots clicked onto the marble floor and his white suit shone slightly in the dim lighting.
“I’ll do whatever you ask me to,” Ryo declared. He didn’t even need to listen to what his boss was going to tell him. He learned not to cross his boss in anything he said. He also had profound respect for him and was not going to jeopardize the only family he had.
“You know that The Ryuu clan and The Yong clan have been at war for many years don’t you?” Nagase asked, licking his lips before he spoke again. “This war between Japanese and Korean Mafias has been going on for as long as I can remember.” Nagase continued, sitting down on his black leather sofa and inviting Ryo to sit next to him. “I have been in contact with Jung Jihoon and we have come to a decision. A way to make peace with each other.” Nagase finished after Ryo sat down beside him.
“What is it Nagase-sama?” Ryo asked, feeling his stomach turning. An uncomfortable feeling inside him was bubbling.
“Arranged marriage.” Nagase replied putting out the cigar he was smoking earlier.
“Arranged marriage?” Ryo asked, in a surprised tone. Out of all the things he could think of he couldn’t possibly imagine that an arranged marriage could solve all of the problems between the two countries.
“I know you might be surprised Nishikido. But this is the best solution we could think of to bring peace between our two clans. You see Nishikido...” Nagase began, wriggling in his seat to look at Ryo closer. “We both believe in the strong bond that holds a family together. We both value the family and so what better way to create a peaceful union than to unite the two families together?”
Ryo nodded, the whole situation a little bit clearer, but still unsure about this decision. No matter how unsure about this he was, he knew he had to comply with whatever his boss was going to tell him.
“What I need you to do is to take my sister to Korea to marry Jung Jihoon’s brother.” Nagase said looking intently into Ryo’s dark brown eyes.
Ryo remained silent looking at the way Nagase was looking at him. He knew this was going to be the most important assignment he would ever have and he couldn’t screw it up. Family was one of the most important things to Nagase and to him as well. He knew he couldn’t fail him and so he got up from the sofa and bowed down.
“I accept boss.” Ryo said, not even daring to look at his boss in the eye.
“Good...your mission starts tomorrow.” Nagase said, indicating to Ryo that their conversation was over.
Ryo straightened up and bowed once more, before turning to leave the room.
“Nishikido,” Nagase called out, “Don’t disappoint me.”
Ryo tightened his lips and nodded. “I won’t sir.” He said, meaning every word, unaware that he was lying blatantly to his boss’ face.


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He bit his lip while furrowing his eyebrows. He hadn’t been in this world for too long and already he was wishing he could get out. The Yakuza world hadn’t been really for him, but Nishikido Ryo didn’t really have a choice.

Being born in a poor family and having his only guardian abandon him when he was just a child didn’t make it easy for him to find a regular job, so when Nagase Tomoya, had caught him trying to steal from one of his shops, he had been surprised by the kindness the man had shown him. So now he stood in Nagase’s office, after what felt like a lifetime of service.

Nagase got up from his leather chair, a fat cigar in his mouth, a frown permanently etched on his 35 year old face. He furrowed his thick black eyebrows and puffed out a cloud of smoke. The whole room smelt of tobacco and it was already hard enough to see. Nagase didn’t want windows in his office. Being the Yakuza leader he was he didn’t like it when rooms had windows, arguing that he would be more vulnerable to attack.

“You have been a loyal member of my clan Nishikido.” Nagase said, his voice deep, in part due to nature and in part due to all the cigars he smoked.

Ryo nodded; his hands behind his back, a serious expression on his young face.

“I have a special assignment for you” Nagase continued, pacing around the room. His black hair was tied in a short pony tail, framing his strong features and his dark eyes. His black pointed boots clicked onto the marble floor and his white suit shone slightly in the dim lighting.

“I’ll do whatever you ask me to,” Ryo declared. He didn’t even need to listen to what his boss was going to tell him. He learned not to cross his boss in anything he said. He also had profound respect for him and was not going to jeopardize the only family he had.

“You know that The Ryuu clan and The Yong clan have been at war for many years don’t you?” Nagase asked, licking his lips before he spoke again. “This war between Japanese and Korean Mafias has been going on for as long as I can remember.” Nagase continued, sitting down on his black leather sofa and inviting Ryo to sit next to him. “I have been in contact with Jung Jihoon and we have come to a decision. A way to make peace with each other.” Nagase finished after Ryo sat down beside him.

“What is it Nagase-sama?” Ryo asked, feeling his stomach turning. An uncomfortable feeling inside him was bubbling.

“Arranged marriage.” Nagase replied putting out the cigar he was smoking earlier.

“Arranged marriage?” Ryo asked, in a surprised tone. Out of all the things he could think of he couldn’t possibly imagine that an arranged marriage could solve all of the problems between the two countries.

“I know you might be surprised Nishikido. But this is the best solution we could think of to bring peace between our two clans. You see Nishikido...” Nagase began, wriggling in his seat to look at Ryo closer. “We both believe in the strong bond that holds a family together. We both value the family and so what better way to create a peaceful union than to unite the two families together?”

Ryo nodded, the whole situation a little bit clearer, but still unsure about this decision. No matter how unsure about this he was, he knew he had to comply with whatever his boss was going to tell him.

“What I need you to do is to take my sister to Korea to marry Jung Jihoon’s brother.” Nagase said looking intently into Ryo’s dark brown eyes.

Ryo remained silent looking at the way Nagase was looking at him. He knew this was going to be the most important assignment he would ever have and he couldn’t screw it up. Family was one of the most important things to Nagase and to him as well. He knew he couldn’t fail him and so he got up from the sofa and bowed down.

“I accept boss.” Ryo said, not even daring to look at his boss in the eye.

“Good...your mission starts tomorrow.” Nagase said, indicating to Ryo that their conversation was over.

Ryo straightened up and bowed once more, before turning to leave the room.

“Nishikido,” Nagase called out, “Don’t disappoint me.”

Ryo tightened his lips and nodded. “I won’t sir.” He said, meaning every word, unaware that he was lying blatantly to his boss’ face.